follow the white rabbit.
feed your head!
what did the dormouse
really say?
i don’t remember.
sick sisters, sleep breathing,
pictures of things with m’s.
stop growing at such a ridiculous rate.
progress without conscience wins again.
i see me in the looking glass.
the same and opposite.
streaked and full and plain,
my alice face tells me a secret.
“she is in the well.”
i freeze
not believing
she is dead.
her spirit treads treacle.
I am madly in love with “Madly”!! So many images that it’s almost hard to sort them all out, but this is a good thing. A very wonderful, good thing.
Great poem I loved this a lot.
Thanks for posting.
thank you for commenting!
Anytime poetry is one of my many passions and I love to write and read so reading your blog is a plateau.
I already commented on this on the ReVerb page but I’ll repost it here:
I enjoyed this a good bit. I know it’s an allusion to the references made in A Mad Tea Party, though if you intended for there to an additional story within it I have some questions. Is the abstraction deliberate during the middle and end or do you wish for the reader to understand how “she” died? Do you think another couplet between “she is dead” and “her spirit treads treacle” might even out the pacing and slow down the arrival at the conclusion? Other than that, I thoroughly enjoy allusion-based poetry (especially when its alluding to one of my favorite works) and you did an excellent job weaving the tattered strands of dialogue from the chapter into a single narrative steeped in imagery.
And as a random-factoid aside: the Dormouse (in the movie) said “Twinkle Twinkle little bat/ how I wonder what you’re at/ up above the world you fly/ like a tea tray in the sky.” Though as for what he said in the book, you’ve covered quite a bit of it. ;]
superb
ok blushing now!